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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table compares the number of fair trade
sales
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 for
coffee
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 and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in different countries in Europe (UK, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium, and Sweden), measured by millions of euros).
Overall
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, the
sales
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 for the two commodities increased in the final year for all countries. Regarding
coffee
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sales
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, Switzerland had the highest revenue in
coffee
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 in the 90s at 3
million
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,
then
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 the figure doubled in the 20s.
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, 2004 witnessed a significant increase
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coffee
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sales
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 in the UK, with the proportion experiencing 18.5
million
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 growth.
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, there was a slight rise for three other countries in which Belgium's income grew to about a
million
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, and 0.2
million
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 each for Denmark and Sweden. Turning to banana turnover, Switzerland had the highest income throughout the period, growing from 15
million
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 to 47
million
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. 4.5
million
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 rises experienced by the UK as the second country that makes more money on banana
sales
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, followed by Belgium proportion stood at 4 in 2004.
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, Sweden and Denmark witnessed a moderate increase to just a
million
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, coffee, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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