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Describe a rule that is important in your school or at work.

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Today, I would like to introduce a unique rule when I was a
college
 student in Singapore. it was that do not cheat. I still remember, at the first class for my
college
, the teacher told us a new word, plagiarize. that means someone copies others' works to pass their exam.
For example
, if students need to finish an essay, but
this
 person does not know how to do it or
this
 guy is lazy, he/she does not want to spend time learning. so in order to pass
this
 exam,
this
 person would like to copy another's essay. Honestly, it is a normal thing, but cheating is
a
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very bad
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. If my memory serves me right, during my
college
 period, one of my classmates copied another's assignment from the internet and was given a strict punishment. I mean, she received an email from the education administration, and
this
 email told her, she failed
this
 subject. For me,
although
 not cheating is a strict rule in
college
, it is extremely useful for teaching the young to become an honest person in the future. Apart from that, it
also
 can teach everyone to respect other's works, including articles, fiction, and art workers.
Lastly
, it is a crucial rule to keep the value of fairness. So, I love it and decided to follow it.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Make sure to structure your essay with a clear introduction that sets the scene, body paragraphs that each contains a unique point related to the topic, and a conclusion that summarizes your arguments and restates your stance. Introducing a hook and a thesis statement can enhance the introduction, while the conclusion can be reinforced by restating the main points and providing a final thought.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your essay communicates the importance of the no cheating rule clearly. However, for a higher score, consider expanding on the topic with a variety of sentence structures and more complex vocabulary. Ensure that your ideas flow logically from one to the next, and use linking words to help the reader follow your train of thought.
Task Achievement
Task achievement can be improved by directly responding to all parts of the task. Specify why the rule is important at the beginning and relate each personal anecdote and argument back to this importance. Offer a balanced view by possibly discussing circumstances where rules may be challenged and how such challenges can be addressed.
Task Achievement
Provide more specific examples and details to support your main points. Instead of stating a general idea, such as the rule being useful for teaching honesty, describe how that lesson is conveyed in a specific educational or professional context. This adds depth to your response and demonstrates a full understanding of the topic.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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