The chart bellow shows the percentage of car trips by purpose and genders in 2015.

The chart bellow shows the percentage of car trips by purpose and genders in 2015.
The given bar chart illustrates the proportion of vehicle travel based on purpose and gender of drivers in one period (2015).
Overall
, it is vividly seen that work was the most popular for both genders in using
cars
, followed by shopping and courses,
while
going to the bank was the least to visit using
cars
in the year. Looking into details, women and
men
tended to use
cars
for work. In
this
case, the rate of
men
utilising
cars
was much higher than that of women, with over a half and just under a half respectively. in terms of shopping activity,
this
figure shows that women used
cars
more than
men
, with almost double for
men
, with (18%). It was the second position compared to other activities for both genders.
Also
, approximately a fifth of the courses that
men
went to in 2015,
while
just 8 % of males used their
cars
for
this
duty.
In contrast
, the lowest rate of using
cars
was for visiting banks, with under 10% of males and only 3% of females in 2015.
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