The chart bellow shows the percentage of car trips by purpose and genders in 2015.

The chart bellow shows the percentage of car trips by purpose and genders in 2015.
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The given bar chart illustrates the proportion of vehicle travel based on purpose and gender of drivers in one period (2015).
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, it is vividly seen that work was the most popular for both genders in using
cars
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, followed by shopping and courses,
while
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going to the bank was the least to visit using
cars
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in the year. Looking into details, women and
men
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tended to use
cars
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for work. In
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case, the rate of
men
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utilising
cars
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was much higher than that of women, with over a half and just under a half respectively. in terms of shopping activity,
this
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figure shows that women used
cars
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more than
men
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, with almost double for
men
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, with (18%). It was the second position compared to other activities for both genders.
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, approximately a fifth of the courses that
men
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went to in 2015,
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just 8 % of males used their
cars
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for
this
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duty.
In contrast
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, the lowest rate of using
cars
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was for visiting banks, with under 10% of males and only 3% of females in 2015.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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