It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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task achievement
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coherence cohesion
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Include a clear introduction and conclusion. The introduction should state the topic and your opinion clearly, while the conclusion should summarize your main points and reiterate your opinion.
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Support your main points with relevant and specific examples. While some attempts at examples were made, they need to be clearly explained and related to the question prompt.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.