as communication technology develops, it changes the way we communicate with friends and family members compared to the past. Do you think this has more advantages and disvantages?
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communication
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development provides significant advanatages
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advantages
this
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and drawbacks. In my point of Correct your spelling
benefits
view
it has more advantages than Add a comma
view,
disadvanatges
.
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disadvantages
To begin
with, communication
plays an important role in our life, in the modern world it is difficult to survive without communication
. Compared to the past, we can speak to anybody we love any where
in the world and it is possible to see visuals Join the words
anywhere
also
. This
is such
a marverlous deveolpment beacuse
when we turn to current families most of the family members live in different locations Correct your spelling
marvellous development because
unlike
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, current parents Correct your spelling
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are able
communicate
with their Correct word choice
and communicate
children
and even grand
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grandchildren
children
, this
help
them to avoid Change the verb form
helps
boardom
and loneliness in Correct your spelling
boredom
thier
older age. Correct your spelling
their
Therefore
, many bussy
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busy
children
can monitor and take care of their parents without worries. For example
, older
days most mothers Change preposition
in older
waiting
till their daughters come to Wrong verb form
waited
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the villege
villege
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village
in
the weekend to see them and talk to them, Change preposition
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as a result
of, communication
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gossip
vedio
calls.
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video
However
, we can see the dark side of Correct article usage
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the
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communication
development. Many children
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are adictted
adictted
to electronic Correct your spelling
addicted
admitted
devises
these days, Replace the word
devices
this
is a
main drawback of Correct article usage
the
this
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. BeforeCorrect your spelling
phenomenon
,
kids Remove the comma
apply
have
time to play with their relations or neibougher friends but now they do not want to play Wrong verb form
had
vertually
, many Correct your spelling
virtually
children
playing
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play
vedio
games Correct your spelling
video
instead
of mingle
with friends and family members. Change the form of the verb
mingling
For example
, recent research found in Sri Lanka, many
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that many
children
suffer from depression from their childhood due to
over useage
of electronic Correct your spelling
use
devises
.
In conclusion, Replace the word
devices
communication
has continuous
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