as communication technology develops, it changes the way we communicate with friends and family members compared to the past. Do you think this has more advantages and disvantages?

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Now we are in high technology era. People experience different

communication

methods to talk

their

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loved ones than past.

This

development provides significant

advanatages

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advantages

to users, in

this

essay I will discuss both

benifits

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benefits

and drawbacks. In my point of

view

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view,

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it has more advantages than

disadvanatges

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disadvantages

To begin

with,

communication

plays an important role in our life, in the modern world it is difficult to survive without

communication

. Compared to the past, we can speak to anybody we love

any where

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anywhere

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in the world and it is possible to see visuals

also

This

such

marverlous deveolpment beacuse

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marvellous development because

when we turn to current families most of the family members live in different locations

unlike

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, unlike

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the

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in the

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past.

Hense

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, current parents

able

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are able

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to live

communicate

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and communicate

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with their

children

and even

grand

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grandchildren

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children

this

help

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helps

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them to avoid

boardom

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boredom

and loneliness in

thier

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their

older age.

Therefore

, many

bussy

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busy

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children

can monitor and take care of their parents without worries.

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older

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in older

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days most mothers

waiting

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waited

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till their daughters come to

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the villege

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villege

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village

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the weekend to see them and talk to them,

as a result

of,

communication

development now they can talk dialy their

gossips

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gossip

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through

vedio

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video

calls.

However

, we can see the dark side of

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apply

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the

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apply

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communication

development. Many

children

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are adictted

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adictted

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addicted

admitted

to electronic

devises

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devices

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these days,

this

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the

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main drawback of

this

phenomemon

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phenomenon

. Before

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apply

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kids

have

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had

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time to play with their relations or neibougher friends but now they do not want to play

vertually

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virtually

, many

children

playing

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play

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vedio

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video

games

instead

mingle

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mingling

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with friends and family members.

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, recent research found in Sri Lanka,

many

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that many

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children

suffer from depression from their childhood

due to

over

useage

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use

of electronic

devises

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devices

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. In conclusion,

communication

has

continuous

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continuously

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developed and currently everything

define

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is defined

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technology. So, we can not avoid it, but it has a lot of

benifits

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benefits

than drawbacks, people have to decide how

use

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it without harm

for

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them.

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Address the task fully. While you presented both advantages and disadvantages, your position is unclear, and the response lacks a clear opinion. Make sure that your opinion is stated clearly in the introduction and the conclusion, and that you spend sufficient time developing your argument in support of your stance throughout the essay.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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as communication technology develops, it changes the way we communicate with friends and family members compared to the past. Do you think this has more advantages and disvantages?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Many people find it difficult to speak in front of and to present to anaudience. It is believed that this skill should be taught in school. Why is this important? To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?

In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree or disagree?

Motorways help people travel quickly and cover long distances but they also cause problems. What are the problems of motorway and what solutions are there?

In many countries children engage in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable experience, important for learning and taking responsibilty. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed rather than work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?