The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
The given graph illustrates the comparison of how many stores closed and how many new stores opened in a country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, the average number of store closures was more than the average number of shop
openings
during the time period given, although
there was a dramatic decline in shop
closures in 2015.
According to
the data, approximately 6400 shops
were closed in 2011. Although
the following years, 2012-2014, the number of shops
that closed experienced an up and down, there was a significant drop in 2015 to below 1000 shops
. The shop
closures then
drastically went up to around 5000 before remained
slightly stable until 2018.
In terms of the Wrong verb form
remaining
amount
of Change the quantifier
number
shop
openings
, 2011 witnessed the biggest shop
Correct quantifier usage
number of shop
openings
with around 8500 shop
openings
. In the next year, 2012, there was a decrease by
4500 Change preposition
of
shops
that were opened. Additionally
, in the following two years, the shop
openings
gradually increased to approximately 6000 shops
before went
down to exactly 4000 in 2015. Wrong verb form
going
Furthermore
, in the period of 2015-2017, the shop
openings
remained steady and then
falled
by around 1000 in 2018.Correct your spelling
fell
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shop, openings, shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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