The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram depicts the data of
incidents
and
injuries
per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) of five different means of
transportation
in the year 2002.
Overall
, demand
respond
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was the
transportation
with
highest
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the highest
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number
and the biggest difference in both
incidents
and
injuires
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injuries
while
that of the commuter
rail
' was the lowest and the smallest. The demand
respond
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had a total of 225
incidents
and nearly 175
injuries
, which almost tripled all other types of transport.
However
, the
number
of injured people of
this
type was fewer than the
number
of
incidents
by 50,
biggest
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the biggest
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amongst all five means of
transportation
. The second highest numbers of incident cases were the light
rail
and the bus, both at 75.
In contrast
, the
rail
had a significantly smaller
number
of
injuries
at about 40 cases
while
that of the bus was almost 60. Heavy
rail
also
had the same
number
of 40
injuries
as the light
rail
but
this
type only had 50
incidents
. The
transportation
mean with the lowest
number
and the smallest difference in
incidents
and
injuries
was the commuter
rail
with less than 30 cases in both numbers.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words incidents, injuries, transportation, number, rail with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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