The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram depicts the data of
incidents
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and
injuries
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per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) of five different means of
transportation
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in the year 2002.
Overall
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, demand
respond
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was the
transportation
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with
highest
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the highest
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number
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and the biggest difference in both
incidents
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and
injuires
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injuries
while
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that of the commuter
rail
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' was the lowest and the smallest. The demand
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had a total of 225
incidents
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and nearly 175
injuries
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, which almost tripled all other types of transport.
However
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, the
number
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of injured people of
this
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type was fewer than the
number
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of
incidents
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by 50,
biggest
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the biggest
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amongst all five means of
transportation
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. The second highest numbers of incident cases were the light
rail
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and the bus, both at 75.
In contrast
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, the
rail
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had a significantly smaller
number
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of
injuries
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at about 40 cases
while
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that of the bus was almost 60. Heavy
rail
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also
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had the same
number
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of 40
injuries
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as the light
rail
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but
this
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type only had 50
incidents
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. The
transportation
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mean with the lowest
number
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and the smallest difference in
incidents
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and
injuries
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was the commuter
rail
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with less than 30 cases in both numbers.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words incidents, injuries, transportation, number, rail with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Passenger Miles Travelled (PMT)
  • incidents per 100 million PMT
  • injuries per 100 million PMT
  • transportation type
  • comparative measures
  • statistical analysis
  • proportionate level
  • anomalous data
  • discrepancies in safety figures
  • severity of incidents
  • frequency of occurrences
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