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The line chart shows average attendance at the cinema among various age groups in the US from 2000 to 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart shows average attendance at the cinema among various age groups in the US from 2000 to 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line chart shows the trend of different age groups of people
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attended
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at
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cinemas
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cinema
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cinemas
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 in the US between 2000 and 2011.
Overall
, in spite of fluctuating, all figures ended up higher by the end of
time
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 period given and people with 15-24 and 35 and over years old were consistently the most and the least attendees.
To begin
 with, the graph for individuals in the range of 15-24 started at roughly 15
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, which
followed
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 by a slight rise to almost 32 in 2005,
then
 fluctuated widely during
next
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 three years before increasing sharply to
high
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 of 58
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 somewhere in the vicinity of 2010.
Finally
, it reached
at
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52 by the end of 2011.
On the contrary
, nearly no one with
35
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 and over
year
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years
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 old population went to
cinema
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the cinema
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 in 2000, which went up progressively to about 13 people
of
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out of
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 every 100
ones
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. As far as the remaining two age groups it concerned, their graph saw a similar trend compared to the former ones, starting at 10 and 4 for 7-14 and 25-35 respectively. With the exception of 2005
where
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 the percentage of 25–35-year-old individuals passed the 7-14 ones, the popularity
cinema
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 was lower among 25-35 than 7-14 before 2011,
However
, 30 percent of both groups preferred
cinema
 in 2011.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cinema with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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