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The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.
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The first map depicts the
city
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 of Darwin in 2009, the second one shows the same
city
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 but in 2014.
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, the green
area
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 of the town increased and new buildings have
ben
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been
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 built over the years. In 2009, the South of the
city
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 was mainly an industrial
area
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. In 2014, that was not the case anymore, since a new footpath was created,
sorrounded
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surrounded
 by a green
area
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. The residential buildings increased and,
always
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in
this
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 Souther
area
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, a new university building can be found. In the first
map
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map,
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 another industrial
area
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 is shown in the North-Ovest of the
city
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, in 2014
this
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area
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has been
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was
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 replaced with a new swimming pool,
that
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which
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 has become the third one present in
this
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 town.
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 but not least, an economically valuable addition to Darwin has been the new
harbor
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harbour
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 that didn't exist in 2009 and can be reached thanks to the footpath that crosses the North of the town from Ovest to East.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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