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The line chart illustrates an economic growth in per cents between the years 1995 and 2010.

The line chart illustrates an economic growth in per cents between the years 1995 and 2010.
The line chart illustrates
an
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economic
growth
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 in per
cents
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 between the years 1995 and 2010. The pie charts present how household
expenditures
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 were split between 6 categories in the same time period with 5-year intervals.
Overall
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, there seems to be no correlation between the economic
growth
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 and
expenditures
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 of residents of
an
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average housing. For the first 5 years of the time
period
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 the
growth
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 had fluctuated between 0 and 1 per cent. Afterwards, the economy started to grow
in
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larger
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a larger
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 pace, which had peaked at above 4% by 2005. Unfortunately,
this
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 figure fell drastically to below negative 4%. Shortly after that, the
growth
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 had reached zero by 2010. In the years 1995, 2005 and 2010, the
expenditures
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 were split in
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almost
exact
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the exact
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 same way: housing took approximately a third of the budget,
while
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 food took about a quarter of the income.
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,
this
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 pattern was reversed at the beginning of the new century.
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, the proportions of the rest of the
expenditures
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 remained the same - clothing, travel and entertainment took slightly less than
one fourth
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words growth, expenditures with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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