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International visitros to New Zealand: transport used during visit

#visitros #zealand #transport #visit
The chart gives information about what
transport
 used during
visit
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visits
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 of International
Visitors
 to
NewZeaLand
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NewZealand
Car
 is the most common means of
transport
 that international
visitors
used
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use
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 during
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a visit
the visit
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visit
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visits
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 to New
ZeaLand
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Zealand
.The percentage of
that is
 69
percent
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per cent
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.
Overall
,
visitors
 prefer to
use
 private
transports
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transport
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 to public
transports
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transport
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 The highest percentage, 69
percent
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per cent
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visitors
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of visitors
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 go to
NewZeaLand
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New Zealand
 by
car
.
First,
Most
of
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visitors
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the visitors
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 like driving
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a car
the car
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car
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cars
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 to New
ZeaLand
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Zealand
 or
another places
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 because it makes them more independent so They prefer to
use
 private
transport
 to public
transport
.
Second,
use
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using
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private
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a private
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car
 help them save
the
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apply
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money,
for example
 , when
family
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a family
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 have a journey to New
ZeaLand
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Zealand
, travel by
car
 saves more money than travel by public
transports
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transport
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.Another reason is comfortable for
car
user
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users
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,
for example
,
visitors
 can go anywhere they want and the journey will take them through many landscapes.
Furthermore
,
visitors
 can’t afford the ticket of public
transport
 so they used to go by
car
. The lower group is public
transport
such
 as
plane
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planes
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,
coach
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coaches
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,
trane
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train
Trane
,
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and boat
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boat
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boats
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.
The
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 small number of
people
 like going to New
ZeaLand
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Zealand
 by public
transport
.
First,
visitors
 like to
use
 public
transport
 because it’s convenient .
Second,
use
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using
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 public
transport
will be
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is
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 better than private
transport
 for some
people
 because it can commune a long distance,
for
example
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example,
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visitors
go
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going
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 to HoChiMinh
city
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City
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 from
HaNoi
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Hanoi
 Capital only takes them 2 hours by plane.Another reason is
use
 public
Transports
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was
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is
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 a hobby
by
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for
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 some
people
,
it’s
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it
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create
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creates
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comfortable
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a comfortable
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 feeling for
visitors
,
visitors
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and visitors
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 don’t need to do anything until arrive
NewZeaLand
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at New Zealand
. In conclusion, most
people
 will choose private
transport
to
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over
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 public
transports
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transport
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 because it’s independent,
save
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saves
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 money and
create
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creates
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good
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a good
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 feeling for
user
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the user
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.
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear organizational structure. Pivotal elements such as a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion should be distinctly outlined. Use of cohesive devices and clear paragraphing would strengthen the coherence.
task achievement
The response partially addresses all parts of the task. You will need to expand on the reasons for visitors' preferences and include more detailed support and examples. Make sure your essay directly pertains to the given information on transportation in New Zealand, rather than including irrelevant details, such as the example about traveling from Hanoi to Ho Chi Minh City.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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