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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Noribton, and planned future developments of the site.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Noribton, and planned future developments of the site.
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The provided maps compare the layout of the industrial area located in Noribton town at present with the plan for its proposed developments in the future. There will be a number of changes, leading to the emergence of a medical
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, a school, a playground and an array of shops among others. The most noticeable change suggested for the town of Norbiton is related to deindustrializing
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 area, which will be realized by replacing the current factories with residential buildings. The
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 road, which currently provides
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 only to the south and the east of the site will be expanded, so that the future residents will enjoy the
access
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 route to other directions,
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 as north and east. Its
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 expansions to the north will not only divide the riverbed in two
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 but
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 the farmland which
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 along the river will be halved with
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new
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 via a fork passing by the river As a part of the proposed changes, all of the industrial buildings will be replaced by some underlying welfare amenities. A playground
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 a school will be considered to be constructed on the east of the site with its
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 through the eastern road.
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, a medical
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 and some shops will be placed on the either northern diagonal sides of the new square which will be constructed on the southern road opposite the current main square.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words access with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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