The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities in the last 4 weeks.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities in the last 4 weeks.
The bar chart compares the proportion of
coffee
and tea consumer's behaviour in five Australian cities.
Overall
, in those five different cities, the majority of citizens went to
cafés
to enjoy
coffee
or tea, except Adelaide.
However
, the least of them bought fresh
coffee
. Turning first to Sydney and Melbourne,
bought
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buying
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coffee
and tea in
cafés
was the majority of the population, over 60% compared to around 45% for
bought
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buying
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fresh and instant
coffee
. The lowest percentage was fresh
coffee
consumption around 43% in Sydney and Melbourne.
Likewise
, people in Brisbane and Hobart
also
preferred going to
cafés
, over 55% and 60%.
However
, the percentage of instant
coffee
sold was
also
significant, accounting for around 53% in Brisbane and almost 55% in Hobart.
In contrast
, the majority of people in Adelaide preferred to buy instant
coffee
, accounting for almost 50%, slightly higher than going to
cafés
around 48%. The proportion of people who bought fresh
coffee
was the lowest at around 34%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, cafés with synonyms.
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