It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to?

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Some people argue giving
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children
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in the early days, but
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others do not support the idea of it. Giving the
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amount of
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would certainly make
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differentiate between
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and wrong, and I believe that action will
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the
children
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even more in their
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or even adulthood. On the
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hand, providing a reward for doing the
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things
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punishment
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for the
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,
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makes
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even more motivated to avoid the bad and eager for the good
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. It is like
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carrot and
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. If they are doing what they are told to do, the parents or teachers let
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a carrot.
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, they have to accept a whip in any type of
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such
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a restric
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restric
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restrict
number of
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that they can consume
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any given
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ahead.
On the other hand
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,
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could leave
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trauma and that leads even making them uncontrollable about what they should do. If
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the case, parenting should be the
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to make it straight about the
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children
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standpoints and prevent
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doing
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from doing
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further
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about what they must not do. Giving a lesson from the story before sleep,
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, can be
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of the parenting
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to teach their
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to
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between
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and wrong
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as
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and villain
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stories
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. In conclusion, I do support the notion
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giving
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will
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children
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a lesson to differentiate between
right
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and wrong and it certainly has a benefit for the long-term period in
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adolescence
or even adulthood.
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, giving them a reward for obeying what they are told to do
also
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can be a complement to
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the
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punishment method
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