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Instructions Read the question below and write an opinion essay.
You should spend no more than 40 minutes on this task.
Remember to write down a clear thesis statement followed by your essay plan.
Only then attempt to write this essay. One way to reduce the problem of traffic congestion is by increasing the tax on private vehicles.
Do you think this is a feasible solution?

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 years, the increasing number of motor
vhicles
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vehicles
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 a huge problem leading to a number of issues which must be resolved by local authorities. The topic's title indicates to
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 increase in the tax on private vehicles. I agree partially with
this
 statement for a number of reasons. First of all, cars and motorbikes are nowadays an essential part of our life, without these we would face many problems on a daily basis.
For instance
, not all the areas are covered by public transport,
therefore
, it would be difficult for some people to reach their
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 or relatives.
Secondly
, to help
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 the
traffic
 congestion, the government could
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 some decisions.
For example
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 the tax for second or third cars possessed by a single family.
Moreover
, the
traffic
 lights should be replaced with
traffic
 roundabouts which would
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 much more helpful for a smooth circulation of vehicles. In conclusion, I would recommend authorities
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take some serious and lasting decisions to manage the issue of
traffic
 load,
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 as by converting the inter-sections into roundabouts and by applying
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higher taxation on second vehicle's ownership.
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Enhance coherence by better organizing ideas and arguments, using a range of cohesive devices, and clearly indicating paragraph breaks.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • **Traffic congestion**: The heavy build-up of vehicles on roadways, leading to slower speeds and longer trip times.
  • **Disincentive**: A factor, usually a financial penalty or restriction, that discourages a particular behavior or action.
  • **Public transportation**: Systems of buses, trains, subways, and other forms of transportation that operate on a scheduled basis and are available to the general public.
  • **Greenhouse gas emissions**: Gases released into the atmosphere from vehicles, factories, and other sources that contribute to the greenhouse effect and global warming.
  • **Carpooling**: The practice of sharing a car ride with one or more people to reduce the number of vehicles on the road.
  • **Telecommuting**: Working remotely, often from home, using digital communication tools instead of commuting to a physical workspace.
  • **Revenue**: The income generated from taxation or other sources that can be used by governments for public projects.
  • **Equity**: Fairness or justice in the way people are treated, often with a focus on ensuring equal opportunities for all individuals.
  • **Infrastructure**: The physical and organizational structures needed for the operation of a society, including transportation systems, communication networks, and utilities.
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