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The diagram below shows the process of using water to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process of using water to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The picture shows the process where
water
used
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is used
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 to produce electrical power. The
proccess
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process
 begins when seawater is heated by the sun and happening evaporation, appearing clouds in the sky.
Next,
this
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these
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 clouds
turns
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 into rainy clouds and
gives
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give
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 the rain. After, rain
gathered
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gathers
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 at
reservoir
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the reservoir
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 and through
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the dam
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dam
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dam,
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 it goes to
turbine
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the turbine
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. In
turbine
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the turbine
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,
water
 pressure converts to electricity and it goes through high voltage cables to
transformer
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the transformer
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 station. With the help of underground
cables
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cables,
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 electricity goes to houses, factories and hospitals/schools. The
water
 in
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the trubine
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trubine
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turbine
directed
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is directed
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 to a pump where it will
returned
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return
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 to
reservoir
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the reservoir
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 again.
Overall
, hydroelectric power is generated using
water
 from the sea and after
procuderes
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procedures
 which consists of ten stages, which
at the end
water
 returns to the reservoir.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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