The chart below shows the resons why people travel to eork by bicyle or by car. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the resons why people travel to eork by bicyle or by car.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts illustrate the proportions of
people
travelling by cars and bikes based on five different causes.
Overall
, the majority of
people
choosing
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cars
due to
it's
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their
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comfort,
while
maintaining
healthy
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a healthy
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lifestyle and reducing pollution is the main focus of cycling.
To begin
, the figures for workers who
prefered
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preferred
to travel by
bikes
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bike
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in order to boost their physical strength and benefit the environment,
accounting
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for the highest amount 30% each. There
is
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are
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minor percentages of employees cycling to avoid parking problems and costs, culminating at 15% and 13% respectively.
In contrast
, only 12%
people
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of people
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believe that cycling saves more time than using vehicles. Turning to the causes of driving,
with
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40% for comfort as their main reason. Followed by, 21%
drivers
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of drivers
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due to
the far distance to their office. The speed and the spacious body of a car were another two reasons for
people
using vehicles standing both
equaly
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equally
14%. The
last
11% considered cars provide more safety compared to bikes.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Commute
  • Cyclists
  • Motorists
  • Sustainability
  • Eco-friendly
  • Caloric expenditure
  • Carbon footprint
  • Infrastructure
  • Accessibility
  • Traffic congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Punctuality
  • Fuel efficiency
  • Operational costs
  • Commuting trends
  • Safety gear
  • Public transport integration
  • Bike lanes
  • Peak hours
  • Weather patterns
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