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The table and the charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britian. The table shows were the money came from and the chart show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.

The table and the charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britian. The table shows were the money came from and the chart show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.
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the table and charts provide the data about how much fund was spent on one area in
london
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London
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 over the span of one
year
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 (2017-2018). the table
display
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displays
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 the sources of
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budget's
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the budget's
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 funds
while
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 the chart
show
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shows
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 where the income went after analysis, for
police
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the police
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budget
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,
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the national government source was the major
fund raiser
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fundraiser
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 of the remaining two jumping from 175
million
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 to 177
million
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 from 2017 to 2018
however
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,
locas
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local
 taxes from residents saw major growth which rose from 91
million
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 and landing an amount of 102
million
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 in one
year
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 of
period
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the period
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while
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 that of other sources marginally shown an
increased
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increase
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 of 0.5
million
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.
in addition
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to
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apply
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, the total
budget
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 of cops in
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London
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london
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London
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 had a significant rise of profit of almost 15
million
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 between the
year
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furthermore
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, the
budget
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 that was spent on officer and staff salaries
had
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apply
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decreased from 75% to 69%
however
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,spending on technology almost
double
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doubled
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 from 8% to 14%
whereas
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, expenditure on
building
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buildings
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 remained the same
through
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throughout
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 the
year
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overall
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, it is vividly manifested that the total
budget
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 of police
officer
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officers
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 had
upward
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an upward
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 trend with the help of
national
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the national
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 government which is a bigger supporter whilst for expenditure salaries remained
primary
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the primary
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, budget, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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