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The table data below shows the top ten Internet users by country in 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table data below shows the top ten Internet users by country in 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table depicts information about the number of
internet
 users who used it from ten different nationalities over the period of
year
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 (2016) After
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ananlysis
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, the highest
internet
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number of internet
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user
 from
UK
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the UK
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 had
major
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 ratio of 92 % making a total of 65million of
population
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whereas
, japan
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had the second highest figure in percentage staying at 91% generating 1
billion
internet
user
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users
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however
, there was a negligible difference between USA and
germany
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Germany
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 having 88% each making
a
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traffic of 3
billion
 and 80 million
moreover
, for
russia
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Russia
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 the percentile number of
user
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 is less than USA with 71% in total attracting 1
billion
 of
user
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the user
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 towards it
furthermore
, the
user
 who used
internet
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the internet
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 from
brazil
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Brazil
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 had
the
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a
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 percentage lower than
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Russia
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russia
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 almost
5
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% of
difference
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the difference
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 between them
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apply
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while
,
that
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apply
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of
china
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China
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 had
the
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half of the
user
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users
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 who used
internet
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the internet
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 regularly with
total
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user
 of 13
billion
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,
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nigeria
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Nigeria
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 and
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Mexico
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mexico
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Mexico
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 there was smallest negligible difference in term of ratio
while
india
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India
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 had the lowest ratio of all the remaining countries
overall
, it is vividly manifested that
UK
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the UK
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 maintained its first spot with massive
internet
user
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users
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while
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India
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india
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India
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 had the
last
 position of
user
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users
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 with
the
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a
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 massive population in total
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, user, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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