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With the rise in popularity of the internet, newspaper will soon become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 of the
internet
 has brought numerous benefits to
the
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society including
increased
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an increased
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 pace of
comminication
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communication
 among people around the
world
 and a chance for more objective and comprehensive information about
things
 are
existed
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 somewhere
in
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on
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the
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earth. At
this
point
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point,
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 there comes a question to the minds: whether
newspaper
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the newspaper
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 will soon transform into a thing of the past or not. It can be easily stated that
internet
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the internet
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 may provide more well-rounded data about a topic and quicker
accessment
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access
 to the
news
, so
newspaper
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a newspaper
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 is likely to turn into an antique item in the future.
Firstly
, since everyone regardless of their position in
the
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society may load
a
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data on the
internet
 via their blogs or social media accounts, people around the
world
ma
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may
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 reach more than one
perspectives
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perspective
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 about a topic which
create
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creates
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more
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a more
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 impartial atmosphere. Imagine that a
newspaper
 which is
belonged
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belongs
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 to someone, it is highly possible that the
news
 at
this
newspaper
are
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is
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 becoming subjective and may reflect
ideas
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the ideas
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 of the writer of articles or the
newspaper
’s boss.
On the other hand
, since there is no boss on the
internet
, each
individuals
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individual
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 can state
about
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their about
his about
her about
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 their own
idea
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ideas
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 freely.
To sum up
, one should always
remembered
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remember
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 that
more
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a more
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 impartial atmosphere may be created on the
internet
 compared to
newspapers
.
Secondly
, considering the fast-paced
world
 where we live in,
waiting
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waiting for
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 a preparing and
publicihing
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publishing
publicizing
 process for
a
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news
a piece of news
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news
 may be time-consuming. Let’s think of a war between two countries,
the
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things
 like which country has more power or advantages can change instantly, and people who are reading
news
 from a
newspaper
 may be informed wrongly, since the
situations
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situation
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 may change by the time that
newspaper
printed
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is printed
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. To wrap up, one should
be
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always
keeping
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keep
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 in mind that especially, in our modern and increasingly changing
world
, reaching
a
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news
 via a
newspaper
 or another printed media
options
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option
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 like journals or articles, may lead to wrongly and lately informed about pressing issues.,
To conclude
, when all the
things
 are taken into
an
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account,
newspapers
 are turning into an
old-fashion
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old-fashioned
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 method in order to
accessing
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access
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news
. Not only
newspapers
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do newspapers
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 usually provide subjective notions
according to
 their owners, but
also
 printing and
publisinh
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publishing
publish
 time may lead to
waste
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a waste
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 of time,
newspapers
 undeniably will soon
became
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things
which
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considering
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considered
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as
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apply
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an
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antique
item
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items
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.
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