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Trade and travel would be a lot easier with a single, global currency that we all use. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Would a single currency cause any problems?

#trade #travel #currency
In the worldwide range, international
transactions
 in sales usually
use
 a single global
currency
. I would argue
this
 is an alternative way for the user to buy something
that is
 easier globally.
However
, a single
currency
 can sometimes trigger a problem, which is a significant discrepancy in total funds. On the one hand, some people are using a single global
currency
 for trading. As we all know, it can be difficult and time-consuming to
use
 a global
currency
 because some banks or cardholders place a high level of security on it.
For example
, international
transactions
 can only
use
 a visa or
mastercard
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MasterCard
 holder; we need to enter the card's
number
,
expaired
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expired
explained
 card date, or perhaps,
in addition
, the code verification for the
selular
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cellular
number
. In
this
 case, just imagine that if you are abroad, it is difficult to
use
 a local
number
, and it will cost extra to get the verification
number
.
That is
 the way the security level makes it difficult to
use
 a global
currency
.
On the other hand
, most people think it is easier to
use
 a single global
currency
 for daily
transactions
.
However
, it is unlikely to cause a problem. For
instant
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, after the transaction happened and the cost we needed to pay was not cut in real time; perhaps
next
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the next
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 day or next month, deposits in the bank
will
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would
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 be available. Each day has a different fund
currency
.
Let
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Let's
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 say that the next day the
currency
 will increase by 1 dollar.
This
 is a discrepancy with the total money we spend.
This
 happens almost every moment because the
currency
 is not stable, even every
second,
and the
use
 gets a considered loss. In the end, I totally agree
if
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that
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 a single method we
use
 for
transactions
 in global
currency
 is the best way, even if it results in different total losses.
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Example:

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global currency
  • economic interdependence
  • financial autonomy
  • exchange rate
  • monetary policy
  • economic instability
  • international cooperation
  • economic disparity
  • global transactions
  • implementation challenges
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