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An overseas friend wants to visit your country on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter Recommend the best time of year to visit and why Describe the types of accommodation your friend could choose

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Dear Harman, I hope
this
 letter finds you well! As you're thinking of coming to India for your vacation, I want to suggest to you that the spring season is the best time to visit our country.
Firstly
, you will be able to enjoy the beauty of nature as all the flowers and trees will bloom.
Moreover
, the weather will be nice and sunny. It will be perfect to go to beaches and waterparks, that you are most excited about.
Secondly
, most of the festivals
such
 as Holi, Basant Panchmi and Ganesh Chaturthi come in spring. So, you will be able to enjoy them as well.
Lastly
, it will be a great time to visit my country as my birthday comes in
this
 season and I am eagerly waiting to celebrate it with you. I have even planned a special event for you. For accommodation, I'll advise you to either book a hotel room or you can stay with me at my house. I'll make arrangements
according to
 your convenience. I am expecting to see you soon. Yours truly, Tanveer
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greeting and closing
Ensure a more formal closing to better match the expectations for a letter format, such as 'Kind regards' or 'Sincerely'.
complete response
Try to offer a variety of accommodations, not just a hotel or staying at the personal residence. Including options such as guesthouses, hostels, or serviced apartments would enhance the task response.
logical structure
While the letter is generally well-structured, it can benefit from clearer paragraphing, with each paragraph dedicated to a single point. Ensure that transitions between ideas are smooth and logical connections are made clear.
suitable writing tone
The tone is appropriate for writing to a friend. However, to achieve a higher score, the language could be more varied and complex.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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