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The pie charts show the result of a survey conducted by a university on the opinions of full-time and part-time students about its services

The pie charts show the result of a survey conducted by a university on the opinions of full-time and part-time students about its services
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The given pie charts illustrate the results of research performed by a university about IT support offered and current opening
hours
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 with the respondents from full-time and part-time
students
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 in terms of giving opinions about its
services
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that in terms of giving opinion to IT support offered, most of the full-time
students
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 said they are very happy with the
services
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 offered and it is
also
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 obvious on their satisfied for current opening
hours
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 which the same opinions.
To begin
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 with, As much as 54 % of full-time
students
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 they said were very happy with the
services
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,
while
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 only 20 % of full-time
students
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 had the same view.
In addition
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, the survey reported that Almost half of part-time
students
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 (45 %) they fill unsatisfied with the
services
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. Current opening
hours
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,
on the other hand
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, as much as 87 % of full-time
students
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 said that they are happy with the
services
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 offered. It seems similar to part-time
students
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 who tend to have the same opinion at 72 % pleased with the
services
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. Only 1 % and 5 % of the
students
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 are unpleased with the
services
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 for the Current opening
hours
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.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, students, services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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