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The table and the charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britian. The table shows were the money came from and the chart show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.

The table and the charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britian. The table shows were the money came from and the chart show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.
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The charts
illustrates
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 the police budget and how they
utitilized
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utilised
 for the past two years 2017 and 2018, in a specific area within Britain.
Overall
, we can observe that there has been a significant increase in budgeting
the
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in the
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 preceding year.
Additionally
, a few subtle differences
on
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in
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 spending
has
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occured
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occurred
. The table demonstrating the police fund distribution in 2017, shows a total of 304.7 million euros, compared to 2018 which sums
upto
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up to
 318.6 million euros. The record reports that national government and local taxes had a slight increase of 10-12% in the following year.
However
, the miscellaneous
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resources
shows
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 to have a
mariginal
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marginal
 increase of 0.5%.
Furthermore
, the chart illustrating the expenses
show
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shows
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 a decrease of 8-11% approximately between the years 2017 and 2018 in the salary factor. Looking at the technology sector, there is a 6% hike when compared to the previous year.
Whereas
, Buildings and transport remain
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constant with a percentage of 17%.
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