The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.  

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
bar chart
illustrated
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the average
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average
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the average
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weekly spending by families in one country,
devide
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divide
divided
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into
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by
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into
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eight different
categorys
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categories
category
and compared
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between
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by
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1968 and 2018.
Generaly
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Generally
speaking, there are most of
money
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the money
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are
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was
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spent
in
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on
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food in 1968,
however
changed to leisure
in
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fifty years
latter
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later
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.
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, the
percentages
of fuel and power
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is keep
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lowest during those fifty years. Looking more closely
in
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this
figure, we can see that except
the
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type of foods
have
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that have
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35
percentages
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of
total
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, there are not notable
different
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differences
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by
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in
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housing, dressing, fuel, household
using
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use
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, personal
using
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use
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, transport and leisure, because their
different
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differences
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are less than 10
percentages
. In terms
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to
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the figure
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for
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of
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for
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2018, the
higest
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highest
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percentage
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percentages
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is
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leisure but only
approx
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twenty-two.
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the type of housing, food and transport
following
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then
by 14 to 20
percentages
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per cent
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.
Moreover
, fuel, dressing, household
pbjects
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projects
,
personal
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and personal
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objests
had
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were
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dramaticantly lower
then
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than
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others, even less than 10
percentages
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per cent
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentages with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 6 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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