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the chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three perios and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time

the chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three perios and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time
#men #women #education #britain #three #perios #fulltime
the bar chart depicts both
men
 and
women
fulltime
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full-time
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 and part-time
further
education
 from 1970 to 1991 in Britain. In 1970 and 1971, about 1000
thousand
male
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males
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 were in part-time
education
,
this
rates
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rate
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 dropped to
avarage
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average
 850000 in the next 2 decades,
Meanwhile
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fulltime
education
 was dramatically down rather than part-time
education
.
Consequently
 in 1971 half of the 200
thousand
men
 gave their full focus to their
education
, after 10 years people
got
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became
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 aware that they
need
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needed
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 to focus more
to
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on
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the
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their
education
, though, after 20 years in 1991 the
number
 for
fulltime
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full-time
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education
 was above 200
thousand
.
On the other hand
, females were an upgoing trend not only for the part-time but
also
 for
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the fulltime
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fulltime
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full-time
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 bookworms. At the
beginnig
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beginning
 of the
period
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period,
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women
was
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were
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 less than 300
thousand
 people
while
 looking to
men
.
Nevertheless
 in the next years frequently increased
number
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a number
the number
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 of people who
start
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started
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 both work and study,
at the end
 of the
period
 around 1100
thousan
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thousand
women
 were in
education
. Despite of
fulltime
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full-time
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 study
were
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was
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 hard for ladies,
however
fulltime
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full-time
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 students
number
also
 increased over the
period
. The
number
 changed from 20
thousan
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thousand
 to over 200
thousan
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thousand
.
Overall
,
Women
 showed progress in both
field
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fields
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,
while
men
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men's
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 progress
flactuated
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fluctuated
fluctuate
 over the
period
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, fulltime, education, thousand, number, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • further education
  • full-time/part-time
  • trends
  • enrollment
  • gender disparity
  • data analysis
  • British education system
  • education participation
  • demographic changes
  • socio-economic factors
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