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The charts give information about employment in the U.K. in 1988 and 2012.

The charts give information about employment in the U.K. in 1988 and 2012.
The pie charts illustrate the data about the types of employment of
men
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 and women in the UK, which the reported years are 1988 and 2012. There are 2 types of employment being represented: part-time and full-time.
Overall
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,
men
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 full-time
workers
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 have the largest share,
whereas
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 male part-time employees have the smallest portion in both years. The percentage of women part-time employees in the reported years is nearly the same. In 1988, 52 per
cent
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 of the employees were
men
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 who worked 8 hours a day, which
had
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 the highest percentage.
In contrast
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, the share of
men
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 who were hired as part-time
workers
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 was 6 per
cent
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 which had the smallest share in both
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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. In the second reported year, 2012, the portion of male full-time
workers
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 slightly decreased to 47 per
cent
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, but it still had the biggest portion of
the
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employment.
In addition
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, male part-time
workers
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 remained unchanged in terms of rank even though it slightly increased to 7 per
cent
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 in the
last
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 reported year.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, workers, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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