The diagram below shows how rainwater is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how rainwater is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration presents an overview of the key
stage
involved in the collection of rainwater and the manufacturing of rainwater in an Australian town.
Overall
there are three main steps namely preparation, processing and using
water
treatment. The whole process of
water
production starts when it rains, the
water
from the people’s house flows down the same drain before undergoing a filter machine.
After
this
, the rainwater is filtered in order to remove any impurities, followed by being passed into a container through a tube which is positioned at the top of the container. In the next step, the filtered
water
through a tube which is located at the left bottom of the container is connected to a treatment tank. In
this
stage
, the
water
is added with any chemicals with a view to be transformed chemically before moving to the final step.
Subsequently
, a penultimate
stage
which is delivering
water
treatment via a pipe is carried out. It
then
leads to the final
stage
of the processing where the
water
is used in other houses.
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