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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first chart reveals the percentage of households
owned
Correct pronoun usage
that owned
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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electrical appliances in a certain country
in
Change preposition
apply
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between 1920 and 2019,
while
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 the second chart
displayed
Wrong verb form
displays
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 how much
time
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 a household spent on doing housework every week in the same
time
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 period.
Overall
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, the ownership of all types of electrical appliances increased during
this
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 period, with the refrigerator
presented
Wrong verb form
presenting
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 the highest growth. Meanwhile, the amount of
time
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 for housework had a noticeable decrease. More detail, the refrigerator reached the largest growth in the
time
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 period, with nearly 0% of households in 1920
then
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 rose to 100% in 2019.
On the other hand
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, the Vacuum cleaner was the second largest growth, starting with its figure of ownership of 30% and
then
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climbed
Wrong verb form
climbing
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 to 100% after 2000. In comparison, washing machines showed the smallest increased feature, with
its
Correct pronoun usage
their
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 number from 40% to about 75% in 2019,
whereas
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 it was the most common of the three electrical appliances in 1920.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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