In some countries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you thimk this is a positive or negative situation?

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contemporary

society,

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plays a vital role. In some states,

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people

believe

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acquiring

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own property is essential rather

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than

living in a rented place. I

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discuss what are the advantages and disadvantages of

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and renting houses and why owning is superior. On the one hand, belonging a own residence is a major investment for human

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Additionally

, it would be a valuable opportunity to provide shelter for future

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For instance

, in Sri Lanka, 75% of people live in their own houses.

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the latest research, it

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their cost of living.

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this

situation, they are able to utilize the saved money for

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research finding is obviously showing the

importancy

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importance

owing

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a home rather than becoming a

boarde

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board

boarder

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, renting may directly

leads

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increase

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the

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cost of living

while

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the quality of life.

Due to

this

circumstance, people who are in rented

place

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they

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have to obey the rules and regulations which are imposed by their

landloards

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landlords

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personals

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people

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have to spend

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amount of their income

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rented

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incured

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significatly

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significantly

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additional expense.

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, it will become more difficult to save money which

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invest

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other

business

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a custodian of own house will provide

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numerous advantages

overwight

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over

the disadvantages.

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, considering the above-mentioned facts, it is crucial to live in

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their own home. In my view is, there a number of

benifits

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benefits

can

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obtaing

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obtained

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become

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by becoming

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a house owner rather than

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being

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a boarder.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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In some countries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you thimk this is a positive or negative situation?

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