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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It can be very useful in learning a foreign
language
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. A few
people
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 say that the only reason for learning a foreign
language
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 for the purpose to travel or work in abroad
countries
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.
While
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 others say that it is not the only idea to learn a foreign
language
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. In
this
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views by providing examples to support my opinion.
Firstly
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, learning a new foreign
language
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 can help
to
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you to
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 travel
different
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to different
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countries
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 across the world and to get
job
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a job
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 in abroad
countries
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.
Moreover
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, some
populace
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people
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 believe that there are several opportunities associated in different
countries
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 for their expected job.
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, a person
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a
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very good technical skills and
wanted
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 to work in a big multinational company but the major company is situated in Japan. So, he
tries
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 to learn Japanese and mastered it within a month. Even though
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 it is not a barrier
for
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to
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 getting
job
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a job
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but
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it will be easier to communicate with several
people
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.
Secondly
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, learning a foreign
language
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 can be used for translation
purpose
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 and it's an individual's interest too.
However
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, few sets of citizens will
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have
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 a hobby to study different languages.
Although
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 it is impossible to learn all kinds of languages, few individuals try as a passion.
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, learning a special
language
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 will help to translate
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people
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for people
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 who
hadn't
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knew
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know
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 about that.
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, there is a talk between strangers from different
countries
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 trying to collect information about the place. As
,
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 both of them are from different localities, a main concern is about the
language
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. Suddenly, one young boy arrived and helped them by translating
to
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for
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 one of the strangers by knowing the
language
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 previously as a passion of interest. In conclusion, there are
variety
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a variety
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 of opinions based on the individuals. I think, nowadays majority of
people
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willing
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are willing
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 to adopt a new
language
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 to travel and for their work. So,
former
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the former
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 statement outweighs more than the latter statement.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure your essay has a clear and logical structure. Aim to have a defined introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. The order of information should aid in clearly presenting your arguments. Use connecting words and transitions to guide the reader through your ideas smoothly.
coherence cohesion
When constructing your introduction and conclusion, clearly state the purpose of the essay and summarize your main points and position at the end. This will help frame your argument and remind the reader of the important aspects of your discussion.
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Develop your main points with specific and detailed examples. Your responses should not only restate the view but also expand on it with supporting evidence or illustrations that reinforce your position and opinions. Relevant examples add weight to your arguments and make your essay more persuasive.
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Fully address all parts of the task. Your essay should clearly respond to the statement and the questions asked. While you may lean towards one side of the argument, it's important to consider and address the differing views before presenting your own stance.
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Strive to express ideas clearly and comprehensively. Your essay should be easy to understand, with well-expressed ideas that demonstrate your command of the language and thought process. Aim for clarity and precision in your expression to enhance the reader's comprehension of your points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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