Discuss both views and give your opinion. Childhood obesity is becoming a problem throughout the developed world. Because of this, some people think that adverts for fast food, sweets and sugary snacks should not be allowed in schools and colleges. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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children

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junk and unhealthy

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in schools and colleges. It is true that

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essential

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now

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, in the world, where fast

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part of people’s

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their parents, so adults have to realise that they are a role

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for their

children

. If seniors bought or ate junk or sweet

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daily

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basis, it is obvious, that

miniors

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minors

would copy them,

thus

adverts

school

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and colleges help

this

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children

could copy their peers,

following

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adverts

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the main role in

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some of the

student

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ask and crave

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unhealthy

food

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Discuss both views and give your opinion. Childhood obesity is becoming a problem throughout the developed world. Because of this, some people think that adverts for fast food, sweets and sugary snacks should not be allowed in schools and colleges. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

Fully explain your ideas

Art and music are considered some of the fundamental elements of all the societies. Do you think art and music still have a place in today's modern world of technology? Should children spend more time learning art and music at school?

Write a letter to a friend telling him about an interesting website you found. Tell your friend – How you found it?How it can help?How you use it?

It is generally seen that most working people do not do enough physical exercise What are the reasons behind this? How can this problem be solved?

In most successful companies, some people think that communication between employers and workers is the most important factor, while other people say that other factors are important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe more actions can be taken to prevent crime, while others think that little can be done. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.