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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 diagram illustrates how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric
eneragy
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energy
station
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. Generaly speaking, the ficilite
collect
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collects
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 the
water
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 from
river
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the river
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 by
control
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controlling
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 the dam,
then
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 using
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power
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a power
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station
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 to generate
power
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, the system
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also
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is also
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 divided
by
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into
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 two different
timeing
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stages
that
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which
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 are
morning
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the morning
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stage
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 and
night
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the night
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stage
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. On the one hand, we only can see
water
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 to generate
electncity
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electricity
 in
morning
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the morning
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stage
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. In
this
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prosses
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process
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, first the river will
thourgh
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through
dam
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a dam
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,
then
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flowing
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flow
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 to
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power
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the power
a power
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station
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,
then
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 the generator will operate to convert to electricity that we usually
used
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use
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. In terms
to
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of
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night
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the night
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stage
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, the
prosses
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process
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 will totally reverse
to
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apply
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the former.
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, the
water
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 from
low-level
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the low-level
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 reservoir will pumped by
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power
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the power
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station
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,
then
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 flow back to the dictrion
about
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of
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high-level
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the high-level
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 reservoir.
Secondly
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, through the line between
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power
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the power
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station
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 and
dam
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the dam
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, it will
keeping
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keep
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 pumping into the intake.
Last
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 but not least, the
water
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 will reach
river
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the river
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 in the end.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words station, water, power, stage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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