The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
diagram illustrates how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric
eneragy
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energy
station
. Generaly speaking, the ficilite
collect
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collects
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the
water
from
river
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the river
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by
control
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controlling
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the dam,
then
using
power
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a power
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station
to generate
power
, the system
also
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is also
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divided
by
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into
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two different
timeing
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stages
that
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which
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are
morning
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the morning
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stage
and
night
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the night
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stage
. On the one hand, we only can see
water
to generate
electncity
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electricity
in
morning
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the morning
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stage
. In
this
prosses
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process
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, first the river will
thourgh
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through
dam
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a dam
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,
then
flowing
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flow
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to
power
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the power
a power
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station
,
then
the generator will operate to convert to electricity that we usually
used
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use
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. In terms
to
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of
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night
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the night
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stage
, the
prosses
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process
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will totally reverse
to
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apply
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the former.
Firstly
, the
water
from
low-level
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the low-level
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reservoir will pumped by
power
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the power
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station
,
then
flow back to the dictrion
about
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of
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high-level
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the high-level
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reservoir.
Secondly
, through the line between
power
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the power
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station
and
dam
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the dam
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, it will
keeping
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keep
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pumping into the intake.
Last
but not least, the
water
will reach
river
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the river
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in the end.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words station, water, power, stage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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