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The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in australia.

The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in australia.
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The bar chart illustrates the community stayed by four different individuals
staying
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namely
zoo
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a zoo
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, library, theater and cinema in
Australia
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. All in all,
this
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 essay will provide information about the popularity of places by individuals who
born
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were born
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 in
Australia
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, new
migrants
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 in English nations and new
migrants
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 born in another country.
Furthermore
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, The cinema
it
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apply
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is
most
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highest among zoos, libraries and
theaters
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theatres
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. Regarding various human
being
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beings
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 staying in
Australia
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, the percentage of new
migrants
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 born in other countries who visited at theater
the
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was the
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 lowest matched with the item places at 10%.
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, at the same rate
who
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as
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 new
migrants
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 born in other countries at
library
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the library
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the
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is the
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 highest
compered
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compared
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 with
zoo
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the zoo
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, cinema and
teather
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teacher
 at
half
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the half
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. In terms of persons
visit
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visiting
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place
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places
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 in
Australia
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, the rate of people
visit at
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visiting
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 the movie
teather
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theatre
 who
born
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were born
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 in
Australia
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the
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is the
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 highest compared with
zoo
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the zoo
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, library and
teather
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theatre
 at around 70%.
Moreover
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, the
individuals
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number of individuals
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who
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whom
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are new
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new
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knew
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migran
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migrant
migrants
migraine
 born in
englis-speaking
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English-speaking
 countries
the
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has the
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 highest compared with other items places at almost 62%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, migrants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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