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Some people think that we learn best through in-person interaction with a teacher in a classroom. Others believe that online learning is more effective. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #interaction #teacher #classroom
Everyone will have their opinion based on their
comfortness
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comfort
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According to
 some people studying through
in person
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 interaction will
have
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effectiveness
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.
While other
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 people argue that
online
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 mode of learning can be effective. The classroom study
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is
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 termed as
offline
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 mode of education.
This
 type of learning is done through
student teacher
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 interaction about the respective topics which they are going to learn for the day. Based on my point of view
i
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 would strongly agree
on
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that knowledge can be gained when we start to ask questions.
Moreover
, apart from
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on
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a textbook
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textbook
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textbooks
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 or
studymaterial
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study material
 the
real life
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 experience will be gained when
expertise
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share
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 their ideologies. A good example would be observation. The teacher will observe each person to know where they lack and perform corrective actions to push
that individuals
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that individual
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 to their limits.
The online
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 learning has started to boom
from
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21st
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the 21st
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 century. In
this
method
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 we can study
about
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anything via easily accessible gadgets like mobile phones, desktops, laptops, tablets etc. In
this
type
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 we can study on our own with online books, recorded sessions and other
few
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sources. I agree to a point that states that
while
 we need to get any information to learn about new topics,
improvise
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or improvise
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 skills we usually go to online references. For
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instance couple of students working on their project have some doubts/questions to get
understanding
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 about something. In
this
case
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 the data present
at
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 various social platforms can be used as a
guidance
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guide
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 to quick effective
solution
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solutions
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. The learning can be done through any way to
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 their knowledge. At end of
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the day
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day
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 it's only about what we gained and not about how we got it. So
i
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I
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 would agree that both
mode
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modes
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 of education will be useful in
improvising
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 their understanding towards a topic.
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introduction conclusion present
The essay requires a clear introduction that presents a thesis statement, outlining your position about the topic. The conclusion needs to summarize the main points and restate your viewpoint more firmly. Having a clear introductory paragraph is paramount in setting a foundation for a well-structured essay. Similarly, an explicit conclusion is essential in providing a satisfying closure.
logical structure
There's a noticeable effort to organize ideas, but the logical flow could be considerably improved. Transitions between sentences and paragraphs should be smoother, and there should be a clear distinction between paragraphs for each view, as well as a separate paragraph for your own opinion. Moreover, each paragraph should start with a clear topic sentence and maintain focus on that single idea.
supported main points
Main points need to be expanded with more detailed examples and explanations. Avoid making broad statements without providing specific evidence to support them. Use real-life instances or hypothetical scenarios to illustrate your points, as they will heighten the level of engagement and persuasive power of your essay.
complete response
The task requires a discussion of both views and your own opinion. While you've attempted to do so, the response would benefit from a clearer stance and more detailed analysis. Make sure that your opinion is distinguishable and adequately justified throughout.
clear comprehensive ideas
relevant specific examples
The essay would greatly benefit from providing real-world examples that specifically support your points. Generic references to technology and social platforms lack specificity. Draw on more concrete examples, like referencing specific studies, educational methodologies, or statistical data that can provide tangible support for your statements.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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