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The bar graph above shows average earnings in the Republic of Ireland in 5 different years, with projections for the future. Earnings are in US dollars

The bar graph above shows average earnings in the Republic of Ireland in 5 different years, with projections for the future. Earnings are in US dollars
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The graph illustrates
overall
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 earnings which represented US
dollars
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 in 5 variable years in the Republic of Ireland, with forecasts for the future. Overview, the year 2018’s
overall
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value
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 salaries were the highest among the 5 different years. The lowest average fee was exhibited in 1968 at just below 8,000
dollars
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, approximately 7,000
dollars
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, which can differ
with
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from
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 13,000
dollars
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 from 2018’s
value
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 of
overall
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pays
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pay
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. After
the
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apply
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decades the number of salaries
reach
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reached
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 the peak of around 10,000
dollars
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 in the Republic of Ireland.
This
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 trend continued until 2008, throughout the period the
value
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 of average earnings
could increase
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increased
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 to 14,000
dollars
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 and 15,000
dollars
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 respectively in 1988 and 1998. The
value
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 of 2008
overall
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 pay plummeted to 13,000 after the subsequent increase.
Significant
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 upward trend happened in 10
year
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years
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, and
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value
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the value
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 of salary wildly upward until
reach
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reached
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the
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apply
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20,000
dollars
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, which could not
see
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be seen
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the
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in the
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 50 years period in the Republic of Ireland.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, value with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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