Exposure to international media, such as films, TV and magazines, has an impact on the local culture. What do you think of these impacts? Do you think that the advantages of these impacts outweigh the disadvantages?

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There
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is no doubt that technological advancement
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makes
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the
world
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into
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a global village. Now
people
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can easily connect with foreign
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culture
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cultures
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easily
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through various international
media
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like
TV
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, films and magazines. There are lots of pros and cons of international
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which will be discussed in
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essay.
First
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The first
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and foremost benefit of global
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is that one can know about overseas
culture
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and tradition through these
platsforms
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platforms
.
As well as
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,
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individuals
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can explore different regions of the
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by following these international
media
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.
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, different travel blogs are
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in
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apply
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TV
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programs from where
people
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can
know
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learn
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about foreign
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culture
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cultures
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.
Furthermore
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,
by
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this
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global
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TV
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anyone can keep
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an eye
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on what is happening around the
global
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apply
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world
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.
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, BBC is a global news
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who
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that
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provide
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various news from all over the
world
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. Another advantage of global
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channel
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channels
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is that these channels conduct live streaming programs which lead to access
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view
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views
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of events. Like
for example
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, global
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channels stream live sports so that
people
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can access these plays from their
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.
Inspite
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In spite
of these advantages global channels have some disadvantages. First of all, global
culture
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mix with the local
culture
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due to
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these types of global
channel
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.
In addition
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,
people
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are gradually influenced by these
channel
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's programs which drive them to adopt overseas
culture
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like dress-up, eating
habit
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habits
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, and family structure.
As a result
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, local
culture
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are now vanishing in many regions of the
world
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.
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, in Bangladesh in the past
people
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used to live in large
family
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families
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but today they are not willing to stay in large
family
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families
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, they prefer to live in small
family
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families
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.
To sum up
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, to connect with the global
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it is needed to connect with global
media
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but it is
also
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needed to ensure the protection of local
culture
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otherwise
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our
existance
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existence
will be hampered.
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