The number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.

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of three significant airports located in New York City in
time
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the time
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range between 1995 and 2000 by the numbers of travellers was illustrated in the
chart
. The
chart
reveals
LaGuardia
and
Newark
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Newark's
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airports having steady
increase
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increases
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over the time period,whilst John
F.Kennedy
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F. Kennedy
had minor fluctuations,
nevertheless
, each one followed an uprising trend. Comparing
LaGuardia
and
Newark
airport's charts, it can be seen that
Newark
had steep
raise
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rise
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until
1997
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the 1997
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year and reached a bit lower 40
millions
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million
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passengers
mark, whilst
LaGuardia
was gradually increasing in
this
time period and got slightly higher 40
millions
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million
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passengers
point.After 1997
Newark
airport was stable up until the end of the
chart
and was nearly the same 40
millions
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million
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passengers
point.
By contrast
,
LaGuardia
airport continued to progressively
climbing
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up
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and between 1999 and 2000 years it got a sharp upsurge by nearly 20
millions
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million
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passengers
.At the start of the
chart
, 20
millions
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million
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passengers
were made up as the difference between
Newark
and
LaGuardia
airports,
furthermore
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at the end
of the
graph
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it was around 30
millions
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million
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passengers
.
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It is essential to provide a clear overview of main trends, differences, or stages as required by the task. Be sure to clearly summarize the main points and overall trends across the entire period in your overview paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • highest number
  • steady increase
  • largest growth
  • dramatic
  • slowest growth
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  • period
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  • major airports
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