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The table below shows the results of surveys about one university in 2000. 2005 and 2010.

The table below shows the results of surveys about one university in 2000. 2005 and 2010.
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Proportion of colleague students giving positive
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 about various standards of the facility they study at.
Overall
, it’s noticeable that between 2000 and 2010,
while
 the level of 3 figures - Technical Quality, Print
Resources
, Electronic
Resources
 went up, the Range of modules offered underwent a slight drop and Building/teaching Facilities was the same
during
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 10 years.
Initially
, in 2000 good voting rate was 65% for Technical Quality
whereas
 the rate for Print
Resources
 and Building/teaching Facilities were 87% and 77% respectively.
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 of satisfied students of Technical Quality diminished to 69% in 2010 before decreasing to 63% in 2005 and Print
Resources
 reduced only by 1% in the same 5-year period. Between the 2 lowest rated figures,
while
 Electronic
Resources
 experienced a dramatic increase from 45% to 88% after 10 years, the Range of modules offered slightly dropped from 32% to 27%. Building/teaching Facilities
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 a unique result by remaining the same throughout the periods with 77% voting.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words resources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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