IETLS Writing Test - The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

IETLS Writing Test - The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph below illustrates
snatching
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the snatching
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of the per
thounds
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thousands
vehicles
in four nations
betweenn
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between
1990 and 1999.
Overall
, It can be seen that every country has had more than 5
vehicles
snatched per thousand
vehicles
between
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within
show examples
the given time frame.
Firstly
, from
outset
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the outset
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,
1990
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of 1990
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,
both
Great
Britain
and
Sweden
had
most
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the most
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cases of stolen
vehicles
, which is approximately 17 and 9 respectively.
Then
in
1991
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1991,
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Sweden
showed slight improvement, whilst Great
Britain
's numbers kept climbing.
Subsequently
, after 1991
Sweden
showed no improvement and in 1996 the numbers reached
to
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apply
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around 13.
On the other hand
,
Britain
's
perfomance
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performance
tremendously improved as in 1994 it reached its all-time low number of that time, which
is
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was
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around 16.
Sweden
between 1996 to 1998 maintained constant
figures
of around 13.
Subsequently
,
reaching
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it reached
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14 the highest the nation has had in 9 years.
Whereas
,
Britain
's number after 1994 worsened reaching 20 in 1997,
then
astounding developments resulted in
Britain
reaching 16.
Both
the
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apply
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France and
the
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apply
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Canada
has
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have
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relatively better
figures
than
both
Britain
and
Sweden
. From the beginning,
1990
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of 1990
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, Canada had thefts of around 7
vehicles
per 1000
vehicle
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vehicles
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, meanwhile, France had 6.
Both
nations faced many ups and downs between 1990 and 1999, France reaching its all-time lowest
figures
of 6 in 1993,
On the other hand
Canada
reaching
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reached
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its
all time
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all-time
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low
figures
of 5, two times, in 1994 and 1998. In the end,
Both
the nations had same number of thefts per 1000
vehicle
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vehicles
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, which is around 6.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand, subsequently".
Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicles, both, britain, sweden, figures with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "improvement" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.

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