The line graph illustrates three different kinds of crimes that occurred in Newport City center between 2003 and 2012.

The line graph illustrates three different kinds of crimes that occurred in Newport City center between 2003 and 2012.
The graph below illustrates the snatching of the per
thousands
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thousand
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vehicles
in four nations between 1990 and 1999.
Overall
, It can be seen that every country has had more than 5
vehicles
snatched per thousand
vehicles
within the given time frame.
Firstly
, from the outset, of 1990,
both
Great
Britain
and
Sweden
had the most cases of stolen
vehicles
, which is approximately 17 and 9 respectively.
Then
in 1991,
Sweden
showed slight improvement, whilst Great
Britain
's numbers kept climbing.
Subsequently
, after 1991
Sweden
showed no improvement and in 1996 the numbers reached
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around 13.
On the other hand
,
Britain
's performance tremendously improved as in 1994 it reached its all-time low number of that time, which was around 16.
Sweden
between 1996 to 1998 maintained constant
figures
of around 13.
Subsequently
, it reached 14 the highest the nation has had in 9 years.
Whereas
,
Britain
's number after 1994 worsened reaching 20 in 1997,
then
astounding developments resulted in
Britain
reaching 16.
Both
France and Canada have relatively better
figures
than
both
Britain
and
Sweden
. From the beginning,of 1990, Canada had thefts of around 7
vehicles
per 1000
vehicles
, meanwhile, France had 6.
Both
nations faced many ups and downs between 1990 and 1999,
France
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with France
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reaching its all-time lowest
figures
of 6 in 1993,
On the other
hand
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Canada reached its all-time low
figures
of 5, two times, in 1994 and 1998. In the end,
Both
the nations had same number of thefts per 1000
vehicles
, which is around 6.
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