Academic-Task1 The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

Academic-Task1

The  diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the
sugar
production procedure from
sugar
canes
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cane
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. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is
readly
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readily
really
ready
apparant
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apparent
that,
this
linear manufacturing process consists
with
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major seven stages. It starts from cultivating
of
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sugar
canes
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cane
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and
end
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up with
sugar
as a finished good.
To begin
with,
sugar
cane cultivation takes 12-18 months
for
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to
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complete the
grown
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. There are two different ways available
for
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to
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conduct harvesting.
The heavy
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Heavy
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machineries
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machinery
types of machinery
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or human
being
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beings
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are used
for
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to
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complete the job. After that, harvested
canes
under go
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undergo
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the production process. The crushing machines are responsible for
extract
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extracting
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juice from
canes
. Later,
obtained
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juice is gone through a purification process using a Limestone filter. The fifth step is making syrup by
the
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evaporation.
Moreover
, heat is utilized as the energy
sorce
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source
which is required to operate the Evaporator.
Then
, the separation step
is taken
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place through a Centrifuge which is responsible
to separate
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for separating
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sugar
crystals from
sugar
syrup. At the final
stage
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sugar
can be obtained as a finished product after the drying and cooling.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, canes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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