Academic-Task1 The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the
sugar
production procedure from sugar
canes
.
Looking from an Fix the agreement mistake
cane
overall
perspective, it is readly
Correct your spelling
readily
really
ready
apparant
that, Correct your spelling
apparent
this
linear manufacturing process consists with
major seven stages. It starts from cultivating Change preposition
of
of
Change preposition
apply
sugar
canes
and Fix the agreement mistake
cane
end
up with Change the verb form
ends
sugar
as a finished good.
To begin
with, sugar
cane cultivation takes 12-18 months for
complete the Change preposition
to
grown
. There are two different ways available Replace the word
growth
for
conduct harvesting. Change preposition
to
The heavy
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Heavy
machineries
or human Change the wording
machinery
types of machinery
pieces of machinery
being
are used Fix the agreement mistake
beings
for
complete the job. After that, harvested Change preposition
to
canes
under go
the production process.
The crushing machines are responsible for Correct your spelling
undergo
extract
juice from Wrong verb form
extracting
canes
. Later, obtained
juice is gone through a purification process using a Limestone filter. The fifth step is making syrup by Correct article usage
the obtained
the
evaporation. Correct article usage
apply
Moreover
, heat is utilized as the energy sorce
which is required to operate the Evaporator. Correct your spelling
source
Then
, the separation step is taken
place through a Centrifuge which is responsible Wrong verb form
takes
to separate
Change preposition
for separating
sugar
crystals from sugar
syrup. At the final stage
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stage,
sugar
can be obtained as a finished product after the drying and cooling.Submitted by shanikamaduri on
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, canes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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