In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax provate car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?
The number of
cars
in
the road has increased drastically over these years. More Change preposition
on
people
are opting to get their own cars
however
the increase of cars
in
the roads Change preposition
on
have
caused traffic problems. There are certain advantages and disadvantages if the government decides to tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation.
One of the main Correct subject-verb agreement
has
advantage
would be Change to a plural noun
advantages
due to
the governemnt
imposing high Correct your spelling
government
tax
would be stopping Fix the agreement mistake
taxes
people
from driving and purchasing cars
. This
will benefit the envirnoment
as it will decrease air pollution. Another advantage Correct your spelling
environment
by
using Change preposition
of
this
money to improve public transportation, it will benefit the population greatly as many people
use public transport like buses and trains daily to commute to work.
However
, this
will cause a disadvantage especially
for families with children and elders. The Add the comma(s)
, especially
convinence
of having a private will benefit them. Correct your spelling
convenience
For example
, parents will be able to drop their children off for school and pick them up after work. This
will also
cause a strain in
their financial budget as they will have to pay more.
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on
To conclude
, traveling
by private car or public transport should be a choice Change the spelling
travelling
by
Change preposition
for
people
. I strongly do not believe that that
the government should impose Correct word choice
apply
such
tax
on private car owners. Correct article usage
a tax
Instead
, they can work on improving the
public transport for the general public.Correct article usage
apply
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