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Topic: Technology and its impact on society Question: In recent years, advancements in technology have transformed various aspects of society. Discuss both the positive and negative impacts of technology on individuals and communities. Provide relevant examples and your own opinion.

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For the past decades, the advancement of
technology
 has disrupted various aspects of society in our
life
.
Although
 it has
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 impact that leads to better
life
 quality in the world,
but
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there are still some negative impacts related to it.
This
 essay will explore both
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viewpoints regarding the development of
technology
 in
individual
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individuals
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 and
community
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communities
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. On the one hand, many
people
 are optimistic about the development of
technology
 these days, mainly
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. They argue that it has
the
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 biggest impact
in
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 our
life
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 since the first time it was discovered by tech
scientist
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.
Internet
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The Internet
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 makes everything significantly way easier to conduct
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activities, from school, workplace, or even government, they always have something to do with the usage of
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in
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their
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 daily basis.
For instance
,
Internet
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 makes us connected regardless
where
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of where
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 we are,
that
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 is incredibly useful for communication and exchanging information without even
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 to meet by face-to-face interaction.
On the other hand
, some
people
 choose to be
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pessimistic
pessimists
 because the fear of
technology
 will someday dominate humanity. The invention of artificial intelligence, and robots
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 frightening to some
people
 who believe
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it. They predict that those technologies could
lead
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 our community at high risk if it is not prevented carefully and seriously.
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 of some professions,
for example
, are the cause of
technology
 shifting in the workplace environment.
Due to
 the cheaper adoption over the past years, slowly
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 replaced by AI to carry out some tasks more efficiently. In conclusion,
although
 the development of
technology
 has produced
the
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a
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 positive impact
to
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on
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life
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lives
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such
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life
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 way easier
by
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 the usage of
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,
technology
also
 has brought
to
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some negativity in our society
such
 as some
people
 losing their jobs
due to
 AI.
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introduction conclusion present
Ensure that the introduction clearly presents the topic and outlines the key points that will be discussed.
supported main points
Provide a more balanced discussion by equally treating both positive and negative impacts with appropriate examples.
introduction conclusion present
Offer a more detailed conclusion that summarizes the main points discussed and clearly states your own opinion on the matter.
complete response
Develop your ideas more fully to meet the task requirements, including a clearer exposition of your own opinion on the topic.
clear comprehensive ideas
Work on the clarity of your ideas, ensuring that each paragraph contains a clear main idea and supporting details, with appropriate transitions between them.
relevant specific examples
Use more relevant examples to illustrate the points made in the essay, ensuring they are specific and enhance the explanation of the impacts of technology.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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