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13.) Should the international community do more to tackle the threat of global warming? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#community #threat
In the
peresent
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present
 time, the international community including all citizens should more seriously tackle
to treat
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global warming.
As a result
, I would like to discuss why we should more
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this
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 problem and give
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suitable examples of each reason. First and foremost, the main causes of global warming
is
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the human
action
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such
 as
development
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 of science since they would compete to be the greatest technology country building
the convicience
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 living.
For example
, in switzerland, constructing the accelerator particle because of finding the tiniest particle has released the amout of gas destroying ozone layer.
Moreover
, within 100 years, The number of living
area
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 is going to decrease
about
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 20 percent
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all
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in spite of having technology for adding
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new
region
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 but the increasing
earth
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 temperature will extend
of
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the desert and sea.
Hence
, certain people will move to the new residence
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become
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the
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 new issue.
Additionally
, the authority should take care of not only the people but
also
 other species in the world that look after the background on the world. So, the
maintainace
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maintenance
 of animals and plants is
importace
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important
 to help the earth. Eventually, If the global community still ignore
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this
 issue, climate change will significantly have an impact
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the
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creature extinction. Certainly, the human will not abandon many resources
To conclude
, all
goverment
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governments
 should rapidly
reseach
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research
 the way to solve
this
.
Otherwise
, A lot of
creature
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 will vanish in the world and we cannot
comfortly
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comfortably
 stay on the land .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global warming
  • threat
  • international community
  • tackle
  • pressing issue
  • global collaboration
  • action
  • cooperation
  • root causes
  • neglecting
  • responsibility
  • catastrophic consequences
  • efforts
  • combat
  • inspiration
  • further action
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