13.) Should the international community do more to tackle the threat of global warming? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
In the
peresent
time, the international community including all citizens should more seriously tackle Correct your spelling
present
to treat
global warming. Verb problem
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As a result
, I would like to discuss why we should more concern
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problem and give Change preposition
about this
the
suitable examples of each reason.
First and foremost, the main causes of global warming Correct article usage
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is
the human Verb problem
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action
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actions
such
as development
of science since they would compete to be the greatest technology country building Add an article
the development
the convicience
living. Replace the word
convenient
For example
, in switzerland, constructing the accelerator particle because of finding the tiniest particle has released the amout of gas destroying ozone layer. Moreover
, within 100 years, The number of living area
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areas
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all
in spite of having technology for adding Correct pronoun usage
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the
new Correct article usage
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region
but the increasing Fix the agreement mistake
regions
earth
temperature will extend Change noun form
earth's
of
the desert and sea. Change preposition
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Hence
, certain people will move to the new residence that
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become
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becomes
the
new issue.
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Additionally
, the authority should take care of not only the people but also
other species in the world that look after the background on the world. So, the maintainace
of animals and plants is Correct your spelling
maintenance
importace
to help the earth. Eventually, If the global community still ignore Correct your spelling
important
in
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this
issue, climate change will significantly have an impact to
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on
the
creature extinction. Certainly, the human will not abandon many resources
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To conclude
, all goverment
should rapidly Correct your spelling
governments
reseach
the way to solve Correct your spelling
research
this
. Otherwise
, A lot of creature
will vanish in the world and we cannot Change to a plural noun
creatures
comfortly
stay on the land .Correct your spelling
comfortably
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