The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliance and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019 The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliance and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliance and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliance and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019
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The line graphs illustrate how the ownership of electrical devices changed and
a
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the
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number
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of time that
has
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was
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spent in housework in households in a single state
within
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between
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1920 and 2019. Looking from an
overall
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perspective, it is readily apparent that usage of electrical devices has increased. In 1980,
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the refrigerator
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refrigerator
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refrigerators
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reached
the
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their
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peak
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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amount
..
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.
...
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As well as
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vacuum cleaner
also
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acquired their highest
number
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in 2000.
However
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, there was a fluctuation in washing
machine
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machines
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through out
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throughout
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the period.
While
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looking at the
number
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of hours versus
years
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, it clearly showed the decrease.
To begin
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with, in 1920, the refrigerator percentage was close to zero.
Next,
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30
years
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, it has obtained
a
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apply
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substantial growth
while
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compairing
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comparing
to others. Utilization of washing
machine
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machines
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started at 40 % and it
has
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apply
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obtained slight growth until 1960.
Further
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, there was
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a miner
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miner
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minor
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decrease in 198. Within
next
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the next
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20
years
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, it was responsible for
escalation
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the escalation
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. There was a constant growth of vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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from 1920 to 2000. After
that
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that,
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it has established
in
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apply
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100 %
uto
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to
2019. The
number
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of hours per week
has
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apply
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started
in
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at
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50 in 1920.
According to
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the graph, there was a drastic drop
till
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to
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960.
Moreover
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, there was a minute decrease was
responsible
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responsibility
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for
next
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the next
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60
years
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. Between 1980 and 2000 period the graph showed the
consistancy
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consistency
curve.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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