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The line graph illustrates three different kinds of crimes that occurred in Newport City center between 2003 and 2012.

The line graph illustrates three different kinds of crimes that occurred in Newport City center between 2003 and 2012.
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The line graph shows the number of crime
cases
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 in Newport City Center between 2003 and 2012. The crimes are divided into
three
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 categories, namely
burglary
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,
car
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theft
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, and
robbery
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that those
three
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 categories experienced different trends over the period.
Firstly
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,
burglary
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cases
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 plummeted over the years. Meanwhile, the
car
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theft
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 category fell steadily and the
robbery
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 trend remained constant.
To begin
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,
burglary
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 became the most frequent incident in the Newport City Center with a starting point of approximately 3400 incidents, followed by
car
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theft
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 with around 2700
cases
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.
In addition
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, the
burglary
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cases
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 reached their peak in 2004 with around 3300 but decreased significantly until 2008 with 1200 in numbers.
On the other hand
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, the
car
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theft
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 started at 2700
cases
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 in 2003.
However
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, its trend remained stable for the first
three
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 years but fell in 2006 to almost 2000
cases
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. For the
last
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 five years, the
car
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theft
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 rate was higher than the
burglary
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 incidents.
On the contrary
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, the
robbery
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cases
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 stayed unchanged over the period and became the lowest number of crimes across the
three
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 categories. Stood at 600, the
robbery
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cases
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 experienced a fluctuative trend but not that significant.
Moreover
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,
this
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 category ended up
in
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at
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 a similar point in 2012 with only 600
cases
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cases, three, burglary, car, theft, robbery with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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