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The maps below show the centre of a small town called (slip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called (slip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given two maps depict the existing condition of the Islip town
centre
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 and the planning development of the city
centre
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 in the near future.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the noticeable changes for the future are dominated by the construction of new public facilities and residential
areas
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.
To begin
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, the Islip town
centre
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 nowadays only has one main road.
However
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, the government is planning to build a dual carriageway for vehicles.
In addition
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, it can be seen that there will be new pedestrian
areas
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 which divide the Islip town
centre
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 into two parts equally (northern and southern
areas
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). Other than that, there will be many new public facilities in the next years,
such
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 as bus station, shopping
centre
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, car
park
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, and more. Most of them will be constructed in the north area.
On the contrary
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, the school,
park
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, and several housings remain the same in general.
However
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, there will be additional residential
areas
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 beside the
park
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 on the south and next to the car
park
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 on the northeast.
Additionally
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, it should be highlighted that there will be a plan for reducing the
park
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 to a smaller size.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, areas, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban planning
  • town centre
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • residential
  • commercial
  • pedestrian
  • amenities
  • refurbishment
  • green spaces
  • public transport
  • conservation
  • modernization
  • facilities
  • expansion
  • renovation
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