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The table below shows water use for different purposes in four countries. The use of water by four different countries (%).

The table below shows water use for different purposes in four countries. The use of water by four different countries (%).
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The table compares four countries, including
Egypt
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,
Saudi
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Arabia
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, New
Zealand
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, and
Canada
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 in terms of their
water
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 usage for three distinct purposes.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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Egypt
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 uses the most
water
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 for agriculture. Another striking feature is that
water
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 for domestic use is the lowest in almost four countries. Regarding domestic use, the respective amount of
water
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 usage in
Saudi
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Arabia
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 and
Egypt
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 is only 6% and 8%,
while
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 that in
Canada
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 is 20%, double the proportion of that in New
Zealand
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, with 10%. Looking at industry
water
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 usage,
Canada
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 is the highest, with 70%, exceeding that of New
Zealand
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,
Saudi
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Arabia
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 and
Egypt
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, 46%, 30% and 10% respectively. Agriculture is the field that needs the most
water
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 in
Egypt
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 and
Saudi
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Arabia
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, with 82% and 64% corresponding.
Furthermore
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, New
Zealand
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 is ranked
third,
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with 44%.
By contrast
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,
Canada
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 uses a mere 10% of
water
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 for
this
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 purpose.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words egypt, saudi, arabia, zealand, canada, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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