Many doctors recommend that older people exercise regularly, but most people do not follow an exercise routine. Why do you think this happens? How can people be encouraged to exercise regularly?

Despite
recommendations
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of medical professionals, the elderly are not engaged in physical activities. Their unwillingness stems from the potential feeling of embarrassment, though the issue can be effectively addressed through the creation of special
sports
groups. The fear of being laughed at is what deters senior individuals from following an active lifestyle. Old
people
tend to be fragile, which does not let them carry heavy loads or
workout
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more intensively. Because of
this
, they may have
self-placed
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perception that young
people
at
sports
centers
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may make fun of them, which discourages them from attending those places.
For example
, a person over 60 is not recommended to do cardio exercises excessively at
gym
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due to
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cardiovascular system.
Consequently
,
such
people
do not even go to gyms, thinking about how embarrassing their performance may look for the youth. The most viable way to tackle the problem is to organize
sports
communities specifically for those over 50 or 60. Surrounded by their peers with similar physical conditions, the elderly may feel more confident about their sporting abilities and stamina. Not only will
this
encourage them to endure more, but
also
create
positive
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atmosphere full of like-minded
people
, which is vital for the consistency of exercises.
For instance
, the Japanese successfully implemented
this
strategy, whereby the aged
people
are assigned to various age categories,
such
as 50-60 and over 60, and are instructed by professional trainers.
As a result
, the participants have shown
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remarkable consistency and achieved their desired goals.
To conclude
,
older
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generation
are
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reluctant to do
sports
because they are shy
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how poorly they can perform in comparison with younger ones.
Nevertheless
,
initiation
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of collective exercising exclusively among seniors at certain ages may be a promising solution.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • motivation
  • physical limitations
  • lack of time
  • fear of injury
  • exercise facilities
  • misunderstanding
  • benefits of exercise
  • social support
  • poor health conditions
  • awareness
  • appropriate exercises
  • guidance
  • financial constraints
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